TOEFL TPO 52 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion of the idea expressed in the newspaper. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 4 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在发音方面，整体上讲得比较清楚，但仍有一些不太准确的地方。建议在发音时注意语速，保持一致的节奏，适时地停顿。此外，注意提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 回答内容在话题发展方面表现较好，观点清晰且有条理。可以考虑在回答中加入更多细节和例子来支持观点，使回答更加充实。

5.语言使用

原文：The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak in the graduation ceremonies. The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies.（在表示“在毕业典礼上”时，应使用“at”而非“in”。）

However, the woman does not agree with the idea. However, the woman disagrees with this idea.（使用“disagrees”更简洁明了。）

First of all, she thinks that there are always business leaders speaking in the graduation ceremonies, Firstly, she believes that business leaders are always invited to speak at graduation ceremonies,（使用“Firstly”和“believes”使句子更自然；同样地，用“at”替换“in”。）

and more influential people from diversified professions should be invited. and she suggests inviting more influential individuals from diverse professions.（改为主动语态，使句子更自然。）

Like teachers who are influential and play an important role in our communities. For example, teachers, who are influential and play a crucial role in our communities.（使用“For example”和“crucial”使句子更自然。）

Besides, the business program is big and well-known enough, Moreover, the business program is already large and well-established,（使用“Moreover”和“well-established”使句子更自然。）

so there is no need to advertise it. so it does not require additional promotion.（使用“additional promotion”使句子更自然。）

However, the teacher training program is less known, On the other hand, the teacher training program is less recognized,（使用“On the other hand”和“recognized”使句子更自然。）

so if teachers can be invited, teachers can draw attention a lot. so inviting teachers could significantly increase its visibility.（使用“significantly increase its visibility”使句子更自然。）

Thank you very much. Thank you for considering my suggestions.（使用“Thank you for considering my suggestions”使结尾更自然。）

修订版（140字）：

The newspaper suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at the graduation ceremonies. However, the woman disagrees with this idea. Firstly, she believes that business leaders are always invited to speak at graduation ceremonies, and she suggests inviting more influential individuals from diverse professions. For example, teachers, who are influential and play a crucial role in our communities. Moreover, the business program is already large and well-established, so it does not require additional promotion. On the other hand, the teacher training program is less recognized, so inviting teachers could significantly increase its visibility. Thank you for considering my suggestions.

6.思维导图

• Disagreement

  • Business leaders always invited
  • Diverse professions
    • Example: Teachers
      • Influential
      • Crucial role in communities

• Business program

  • Large and well-established
  • No additional promotion needed

• Teacher training program

  • Less recognized
  • Inviting teachers increases visibility

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语言流利度和语速较为稳定，但偶尔会有停顿。为了提高发言质量，建议在练习时注意掌握适当的停顿，以及提高发音的准确性。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上涵盖了所需的观点和原因。但在组织结构上可以进一步优化，例如可以更清晰地表达女生的观点和原因。为了提高话题发展质量，建议在练习时注意提高回答的条理性和连贯性。

5.语言使用

Original: It is proposed that the business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. The proposal suggests that a business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. (建议使用更自然的表达方式)

Original: Firstly, because they are the role models for students and they can help reinforce to the community. First, they serve as role models for students and can help strengthen the community's perception of success. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Original: However, in the listening part, the girls disagree with this. However, in the listening passage, the woman disagrees with this idea. (使用更准确的描述)

Original: Firstly, this is because it's always a business leader speaking at the graduation ceremony. Her first reason is that business leaders always speak at graduation ceremonies. (改进句子结构)

Original: And we should invite another influential people such as teachers to add the speaker. She suggests inviting other influential figures, like teachers, as speakers instead. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Original: This is because a business program is big enough and it didn't need more advertisement. This is because the business program is already well-established and doesn't need additional promotion. (改进句子结构和时态)

Original: However, the education program which is about the training teacher program is beneficial for the society. However, the education program, specifically the teacher training program, would benefit society. (改进句子结构和词汇)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that a business leader should be the speaker at the graduation ceremony. First, they serve as role models for students and can help strengthen the community's perception of success. However, in the listening passage, the woman disagrees with this idea. Her first reason is that business leaders always speak at graduation ceremonies. She suggests inviting other influential figures, like teachers, as speakers instead. This is because the business program is already well-established and doesn't need additional promotion. However, the education program, specifically the teacher training program, would benefit society. By inviting a local teacher to speak at the ceremony, it could draw attention to this lesser-known but valuable program and potentially attract more prospective students interested in pursuing a career in education.

6.思维导图

• Proposal

  • Business leader as speaker
  • Role models
  • Strengthen community perception

• Woman's disagreement

  • Business leaders always speak
  • Need for variety

• Suggestion

  • Invite influential figures (teachers)
  • Benefit other programs (education)
    • Teacher training program
    • Attract prospective students

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速适中，但偶尔有停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高连贯性，减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者的回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在表述观点时可以更加明确和具体。建议在练习时关注提供更多支持观点的细节和例子，以便让回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: In the announcement, somebody in the university asked the university to invite famous business leaders in the graduation ceremony so that make the business guru program more famous and have many beneficials. But the guru totally disagreed about this solution. First of all, she thinks that they have already invited many business leaders in the ceremony in the past few years and she thinks there should be some change, such as inviting some teachers. And also, a teacher is a very important role in the society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is big enough and very famous enough, but the education program is not.

Corrected Answer: In the announcementletter, somebody ina student from the university askedsuggested that the university invite famous business leaders toin the graduation ceremony,. This would makepromote the business guruprogram and have many beneficialsbenefits. However, the woman disagreed with this solutionproposal. Firstly, she believes that they have already invited numerous business leaders toin past ceremonies and that there should be a change, such as inviting teachers. Additionally, teachers play a crucial role in society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is already well-established and renowned, but the education program is not.

(原文中的“announcement”应改为“letter”，因为这是一封信。原文中的“somebody in”应改为“a student from”，以更准确地描述信的来源。原文中的“asked”应改为“suggested that”，以使句子更自然。原文中的“make”应改为“promote”，以使词汇更准确。原文中的“guru”应改为“program”，以避免混淆。原文中的“beneficials”应改为“benefits”，以使语法正确。原文中的“solution”应改为“proposal”，以使表达更准确。)

Revised Answer (140 words): In the letter, a student from the university suggested that the university invite famous business leaders to the graduation ceremony. This would promote the business program and provide many benefits. However, the woman disagreed with this proposal. Firstly, she believes that they have already invited numerous business leaders to past ceremonies, and it's time for a change, such as inviting teachers who play a crucial role in society. Secondly, she thinks the business program is already well-established and renowned, so it doesn't need further promotion. On the other hand, the education program could benefit from increased exposure and recognition. By inviting a local teacher to speak at the graduation ceremony, the university could draw attention to its excellent teacher training program and attract more prospective students interested in pursuing a career in education.

6.思维导图

• Letter

  • Suggestion
    • Invite business leaders
    • Promote business program

• Woman's disagreement

  • Already invited business leaders
  • Need for change
    • Invite teachers
      • Crucial role in society
  • Business program well-established
  • Education program needs exposure

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：4

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：26

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速基本上是清晰和流畅的，但有时会出现不必要的停顿。建议练习更连贯的表达，减少不必要的停顿，以提高交付得分。

4.话题发展 回答内容组织得很好，观点之间的联系清晰，提供了充足的支持和例子。在这方面无需改进。

5.语言使用

原文：A student suggests that the business leader should be invited to the graduation ceremony as they serve as an excellent role model for the business students and can help enhance the reputation of the business program in the community. The student suggests inviting a business leader to the graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community.（将句子结构进行了调整，使其更自然流畅。）

原文：However, in a conversation, the woman disagrees with this proposal. However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea.（将“in a conversation”改为“during their conversation”，使句子更具体；将“proposal”改为“idea”，使词汇更自然。）

原文：Firstly, she believes that since the university has invited business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions, such as teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. First, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community.（将“Firstly”改为“First”，使语言更自然；将“has invited”改为“invites”，使时态一致。）

原文：Secondly, she believes that business programs are already very well known to the public. Second, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public.（将“Secondly”改为“Second”，使语言更自然；去掉“very”，使语言更简洁。）

原文：However, other programs, like the education program, are not as well known in the community. However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community.（将“like”改为“such as”，使语言更正式。）

原文：Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would attract more attention to the education program, which would be advantageous, and as a result, she disagrees with this proposal. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this idea.（将“attract”改为“draw”，使词汇更自然；将“advantageous”改为“beneficial”，使词汇更自然；将“proposal”改为“idea”，使词汇更自然。）

修订后的回答（140字）：

The student suggests inviting a business leader to the graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models for business students and can help improve the business program's reputation in the community. However, during their conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea. First, she believes that since the university invites business leaders every year, it should also consider inviting influential individuals from other professions like teachers, who have a significant impact on the community. Second, she believes that business programs are already well-known to the public. However, other programs, such as the education program, are not as well-known in the community. Therefore, she believes that inviting teachers to the ceremony would draw more attention to the education program, which would be beneficial, and as a result, she disagrees with this idea.

6.思维导图

• Introduction

  • Student's suggestion
  • Business leader as a speaker

• Woman's disagreement

  • Reasons
    • Variety in professions
      • Teachers as an example
    • Business programs' reputation
      • Already well-known
    • Education program
      • Needs more attention

• Conclusion

  • Woman's opinion

7.关键词

1.Sub Scores Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

23. 3.Delivery

The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some punctuation problems that result in inappropriate pauses. To improve, the speaker should focus on proper punctuation usage and work on accurate pronunciation to avoid spelling errors.

4.Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details or examples to further support the woman's opinion. To enhance topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the reasons behind the woman's disagreement with the proposal and provide more concrete examples of how other professions could be influential speakers at the graduation ceremony.

5.Language Use

The student proposed that they should have a business leader for the graduation ceremony because a business leader is always means for professional success and this will reinforce the community that their program is the best and the biggest program of the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she thinks business people always come for the graduation ceremony. They should have other occupations and also influential jobs to speak for the graduation ceremony like teachers. Secondly, she thinks that the program is already quite big and well-known and it doesn't need to have a business leader on the ceremony to attract extra attention. However, the education of the student is very important.

The student proposed that they should have a business leader prominent business figure for the graduation ceremony because a business leader prominent business figure always means symbolizes professional success(changed "means" to "symbolizes" for better word choice), and this will reinforce(added comma for clarity) to the community that their program is the best and biggest in the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she believes(changed "thinks" to "believes" for variety) that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies(clarified context). They should invite speakers from other influential professions, such as teachers. Secondly, she contends that since the program is already well-established and widely recognized, it doesn't require a business leader at the ceremony to garner additional attention. Instead, she emphasizes the importance of focusing on students' education.

Revised Answer (140 words):

The student proposed that they should have a prominent business figure for the graduation ceremony because such a figure symbolizes professional success, and this will reinforce to the community that their program is the best and biggest in the state. However, in the dialogue, the woman disagrees with this proposal. First of all, she believes that business people always speak at graduation ceremonies and suggests inviting speakers from other influential professions, such as teachers. Secondly, she contends that since the program is already well-established and widely recognized, it doesn't require a business leader at the ceremony to garner additional attention. Instead, she emphasizes the importance of focusing on students' education and believes that showcasing other professions would provide a more diverse and enriching experience for graduates.

6.Mind Map

- Proposal
  - Prominent business figure
  - Symbolizes professional success
  - Reinforce program's reputation

- Woman's disagreement
  - Business people always speak at ceremonies
  - Invite other influential professions (e.g., teachers)

- Program's current status
  - Well-established and widely recognized
  - Doesn't require additional attention from a business leader

- Emphasis on students' education
  - Showcasing other professions for diversity and enrichment

7.Key Words

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3.5 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方有不必要的停顿。建议发言者在练习时注意提高语音连贯性和减少不必要的停顿。此外，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的阐述，提出了与女士观点相关的理由。然而，在组织结构上还有改进空间。建议发言者在练习时注意明确表达观点，并在给出理由时保持条理清晰。同时，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和过渡词汇来增强论述之间的联系。

5.语言使用

Original Answer: opinion in the letter. The woman expresses her opinion on the idea presented in the letter. (修改了句子结构，使其更自然) The woman they said there is always a business person to speak in the year's graduation ceremony and it's time to have a change. Maybe they can give the chance to other influential jobs such as teachers. As for the statement that in the letter that the business person can reinforce business program, the woman states that the business program was already big and doesn't need to be improved by the free advertisement. However, education, because it's not well known, it can benefit greatly from this free advertisement and gain popularity.

Revised Answer: The woman expresses her opinion on the idea presented in the letter, stating that there is always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies, and it's time for a change. She suggests giving opportunities to other influential professions, such as teachers. Regarding the statement in the letter about a business person reinforcing the business program, she argues that since it is already well-established, it doesn't need further improvement through free advertisement. On the other hand, she believes that education, being less well-known, could greatly benefit from this exposure and gain popularity.

Revised Answer (140 words): The woman disagrees with the idea presented in the letter and believes it's time for a change since there is always a business person speaking at graduation ceremonies. She suggests considering other influential professions like teachers for this role. She argues that although having a business leader as a speaker might reinforce the business program, it is already well-established and doesn't need further improvement through free advertisement. Instead, she believes that education, being less well-known, could greatly benefit from this exposure and gain popularity. By inviting a local teacher as a speaker, the university could draw attention to its education program, which would be a more effective use of the opportunity.

6.思维导图

- Woman's opinion
  - Disagrees with the letter
  - Time for a change

- Other professions
  - Teachers as speakers

- Business program
  - Already well-established
  - Doesn't need free advertisement

- Education program
  - Less well-known
  - Could benefit from exposure

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

在这个回答中，发言者的表达相对清晰，但仍有一些不太自然的停顿。为了提高发言的流畅性，建议发言者注意在句子之间保持恰当的停顿，同时避免在不需要的地方停顿。此外，尝试提高发音的准确性，以减少拼写错误。

4.话题发展 发言者对话题进行了较好的发展，提出了女士对邀请商业领袖发表演讲的看法及其原因。然而，回答中部分观点的连接略显生硬。建议在陈述观点时更加注意逻辑性和连贯性，以使回答更加有条理。同时，在解释原因时可以尝试提供更多具体的例子或细节，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: It is proposed that the university should invite some business leaders to speak at this year's graduation ceremony because they are excellent role models because they represent the meaning of professional success and also can reinforce to the company that business program is the biggest and best one in the state. The proposal suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at this year's graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models who represent professional success and can reinforce the prestige of the business program within the state. (建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复使用"because"。)

In the conversation, the woman think it is not a good idea based on two reasons. In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. (改进语法和表达。)

First, she states that it is always the business person who have a speech. First, she states that it is always business people who give speeches at graduation ceremonies. (改进语法和词汇选择。)

The university can also invite some influential and successful person from other professions like teachers and the program is already well-known and quite big so it doesn't need some extra attention and free advertising that graduation speakers would bring. The university could also invite influential and successful individuals from other professions, such as teachers. Moreover, since the business program is already well-known and prominent, it doesn't require additional attention or free advertising from graduation speakers. (改进句子结构，使表达更清晰。)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The proposal suggests that the university should invite business leaders to speak at this year's graduation ceremony, as they are excellent role models who represent professional success and can reinforce the prestige of the business program within the state. In the conversation, the woman disagrees with this idea for two reasons. First, she states that it is always business people who give speeches at graduation ceremonies. The university could also invite influential and successful individuals from other professions, such as teachers. Moreover, since the business program is already well-known and prominent, it doesn't require additional attention or free advertising from graduation speakers.

6.思维导图

- Proposal
  - Invite business leaders
  - Graduation ceremony
  - Role models
  - Professional success
  - Prestige of business program

- Woman's disagreement
  - Always business people speaking
  - Other professions (e.g., teachers)
  - Business program already well-known
  - Doesn't require additional attention or advertising

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达较为清晰，语速适中。但在某些地方，发言者的停顿不太合适，可能会影响听众的理解。建议发言者在练习时注意自己的语音、语调和停顿，以便更好地表达自己的观点。

4.话题发展 发言者对于问题的回答较为完整，能够明确表达女生的观点及其原因。但在组织结构上还有待提高，可以尝试使用更清晰的逻辑连接词来帮助听众更好地理解观点之间的关系。同时，在提供支持或举例时，可以尝试使用更具体和详细的信息来增强说服力。

5.语言使用

Original: In a letter, the students suggest the school can invite some business leader to the graduation ceremony, which can help the students to learn a lot and also improve more attention on the business program in the school. However, according to the listening, the student disagreed with that statement because she thinks that the graduation ceremony always invites business people, and she thinks it can be a great chance to invite other professional people such as teachers. She thinks the business program at the school is already quite big, however, the education program is also a very well-programmed, but it will definitely need more attention on it, so she thinks it will be a good chance to invite an education leader to the school.

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(删除了多余的定冠词，改进了语法和句子结构，使句子更自然。)

Revised (140 words): In a letter, students suggest that the school can invite a business leader to the graduation ceremony, which can help students learn and draw more attention to the business program in the school. However, according to the listening, one student disagrees as she believes the graduation ceremony always invites business people; thus, it would be better to invite professionals from other fields, like teachers. She thinks the business program at the school is already quite big but the education program is also well-established; however, it needs more attention. Therefore, she believes it would be a good opportunity to invite an education leader to speak at the graduation ceremony, which could not only provide variety but also promote and draw attention to the school's education program.

6.思维导图

• Letter

  • Business leader
  • Graduation ceremony
  • Attention to business program

• Listening

  • Student's disagreement
  • Always business people
  • Other professionals (teachers)

• Business program

  • Already big

• Education program

  • Well-established
  • Needs more attention

• Suggestion

  • Invite education leader

7.关键词